I have joined a Writers Challenge Campaigner and this is Rachel’s.
Write a short story/flash fiction story in 200 words or less, excluding the title. It can be in any format, including a poem. Begin the story with the words, “The door swung open” These four words will be included in the word count.
If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional), use the same beginning words and end with the words: “the door swung shut.” (also included in the word count)
For those who want an even greater challenge, make your story 200 words EXACTLY!
Well here is mine … 200 words exactly.
The Door flew Open
The Door flew open, she didn’t turn around, she knew who it was. A smile etched from the corners of her moist lips feeling his muscular body rub ever so gently against her back. His hands moved to the tie of her robe, undoing the knot, it slipped to the floor. A finger glided a strand of hair back behind her right ear, leaning in he brushed his lips against the small of her lobe, his tongue darting inside, his fingers made their way down her neck following the opening of the robe. Her breathing increased and her heart beat faster at the share delight of his touch. She moved her head to the side allowing his mouth to find her eager lips. His hand slid inside the robe his fingers clenched her ripe nipple causing a tingling sensation to her stomach.
knock at the door.
“Your car is here sir”
“arr… thankyou. Be right down.” he quickly stepped back. She clasped the opening of her robe together with her hand and smiled shyly.
“Beg your pardon, madam, I must go”. catching her soft eyes as he bowed, he hesitated briefly before leaving the room, the door swung shut.
wow okay, I guess I have to get ready now and move! 🙂
lol… *winks*, I hope not!
Nice to see you here.
Definitely makes mine seem very tame!
Hardly, I may have them moving out, note: Cynthia is already…lol..
(and I know what you can write.)
I thought Cynthia meant she’d better get moving and write her own short fiction.
Racey stuff! I’m wondering what the relationship is between the MC and the amorous man. Intriguing!
Intriguing indeed 🙂 Thankyou so glad you liked it.
Sexy! I’m left wondering… is she a madam? Is this a mock role-play between long time lovers? Good stuff. ~ Nadja
LOL, I am so happy I gave you something to think about. Lovely of you to drop by and thanks for the comment.
There were only a few romance entries in this challenge, which surprised me! Congrats on being shortlised – and good luck to you! And thank you for stopping by my page and leaving such a nice comment. It is appreciated. ~ Nadja
I like how you refused to clarify their relationship to each other… leaves lots of questions 🙂
Thankyou, glad you liked it. 🙂
Woohoo! This is the first romance version I’ve read. Very…um…yeah. *blushes*
🙂 LOL, I’m only hoping there’s no age restriction…LOL. So pleased you dropped by, please come again and thanks for your comment.
Now that’s some spicey romance there. Very nice.
*blushes* thankyou for your comment Angela, do call again.
Beth, (I lost the reply button on your last comment) So posted here ..
“Oh! could be…. LOL, thankyou for your comment by the way”.
Oooh, naughty naughty, but fun! 😉
LOL Thankyou F .. *blushes* 🙂
They don’t know each other…? Is he a gigolo? lol Nice work!
I Think the first line says she did know him, and she smiled…. mmm maybe he is, maybe he isn’t…lol. Thankyou, you have me wondering now….lol.
Ooh, leaves me wondering about the relationship too. I love seeing where these first few words “The door swung shut,” is taking everyone in their story.
*raises eyebrows*, yes I wonder what is happening behind all these closed doors…lol. Glad you popped by Kimberly.
Very Hot! And Funny! *fans face* New follower here, stopping by from the campaign 🙂
lol…. *offers to turn fan up another notch* So happy you dropped by, don’t forget to come back again soon Lady Gwen.
Makes me want to know who they are and what’s going on. Great little story!
Thankyou very much Ruth, glad you stopped by.
Very sexy. And you’ve set it up so the reader has tons of questions. Nice.
Thankyou KM, any feedback is very welcome. Nice to see you here.
Steamy. Great entry (tease) for the challenge. 🙂
LOL thankyou Lynda for your comment, nice to see you again.
very seductive and steamy — couldn’t believe it was you! I liked it a lot! Voted for you. I’m #85, buy my photo didn’t take.
LOL thankyou so much Pat. Oh yes it’s me…lol.(sometimes), I am sure we can fix your pic. I had the same problem to, just takes time. So good to see you here.
Amping up the blush factor! Great entry 🙂
lol Yep!, Nice to see you here Coleen, hope you’ll pop back.
I didn’t know you could pump that much steam into 20 words.
20 words????? …it’s 200 words…LOL. Thankyou Aarn.
LOL…I’m liking how people are trying to figure out the identities of this couple! I’m thinking that since he addressed her as madam that either she is married to a person in a powerful position if she is not in one herself. As for the guy…I’m thinking somehow that he is a business associate of husband. 🙂
LOL… I am having so much fun just reading the comments. Don’t know how many times I have nearly fallen off my seat with laughter.
You are close, very close……..lol.
The amorous parts were nice, but I was more interested in the “Madam” comment. What, exactly, is the relationship between them, hm?
I sit here grinning from ear to ear, wondering what you all are thinking, have fun working it out…
Lovely that you popped in.
Tantalizing! Always that darn knock at the door. I have the feeling that the woman played that timing to her advantage, though. Good job!
LOL , You think!…mmm. Thankyou for your comment Christine, that puts another dimension on it.
Teaser!! Good stuff…
LOL, Thankyou doreen, glad you liked it. Pop back again soon.
I’ve been reading some today. I agree with Lynda – it’s a great entry (tease) for the challenge.
Thankyou very much Stacey, pleased you liked it.
Very good. I didn’t want him to go. I’m #72
LOL Nor did I, bridgetstraub. Off to checkout No.72.
What a tease!! hehe
LOL Thankyou, Trishia, nice to see you here.
This makes me want to know the backstory here. Good job!
Thankyou Jen, so pleased you liked it. Nice to see you here.
Wow, that was steamy! WTG…200 hundred words aren’t a lot, but you’ve got a great (grown up) scene here. 😀
Thankyou Sharon, glad you liked it..:-)
definitely not picture book material, very steamy, Diane 🙂
*blushes* ….umm, no it isn’t, is it!…LOL Thanks Joanna.
Cold shower, here I come. Hot stuff!
Lol. Glad you like it Holly. Nice to see you here.
Very exciting! Great how we have no idea about the relationship. You can definitely write romance 🙂
Thankyou Catherine for your lovely comment. Sometimes we are often unaware of what “hidden” talents we have.
Who is she? Who is he? More please!
LOL…. sorry only 200 words, remember….LOL I love that you want to know more.
More wanted here too! Nicely done.
Hello there! You’ve been shrotlisted to round two of the challenge!
Wow! Thankyou Raquel.
WOW! Definitely not what I was expecting from a fellow Picture Book/Early Reader/Chapter Book/MG/YA writer! Great piece!
Lol Thankyou Susanna, thought I would surprise everyone..
My mouth is gaping open! Fun!
Lol.. I was always told to watch for flys if I did that…lol. Thanks candy
Hey love it, like a bit of a teaser – and glad mine isn’t the only naughty one!
Glad you like it Susie……umm no you have company…lol.
Ha! That was quite the eye opener to read first thing in the morning:) You’ve got me wondering too…who was that dude?:)
LOL, Morning! Glad you liked it…. Thanks for stopping by Deana.
You are right, we do have something in common. Though yours is steamer than mine! LOL
Lol, thankyou, and thanks for stopping by Sonia.
Woo! Definitely left wondering what their relationship is! Especially since he comes in ever so boldly but leaves in a timid manner calling her madam. Intrigued. 😉
Intriguing indeed! Pleased you like this Amanda
Risque and intriguing. I do need to know who these people are because I keep getting a disconcerting picture in my mind of certain members of the royal family… no… It isn’t is it?
LOL …. Oh My! thats very good….mmm no it isn’t but your close… LOL. I get more enjoyment from these comments than writing the story… Oh did I say that? *blushes*
Steamy! The relationship is between the MC and the man left me wondering who had the upper hand – but I think you described that in some detail ;).
mmm… I did didn’t I? …lol. Thankyou Elaine for dropping by, hope to see you again soon.
Perhaps “Madam” is his pet-name for his wife? Or would that spoil the story?
LOL!….. Oh my! … that is very clever thinking, but no, its not…LOL.
You are a mystery to me FTSE as my story is, welcome.
Really, he had to go? I kinda wondered what she had to smile about. At that point. I’d probably be getting ready to kill him. Quite a mysterious piece.