Third Platform Builder Campaign Challenge

In the final of Rachel Harrie’s Platform Builder Campaign, she has set us an even greater challenge.  One that I often wrestle with…….

Show not Tell

It is… Write a blog post in 300 words or less, excluding the title. The post can be in any format, whether flash fiction, non-fiction, humorous blog musings, poem, etc. The blog post should show:

  • that it’s morning,
  • that a man or a woman (or both) is at the beach
  • that the MC (main character) is bored
  • that something stinks behind where he/she is sitting
  • that something surprising happens.

Just for fun, see if you can involve all five senses AND include these random words: “synbatec,”  “wastopaneer,” and “tacise.”   (NB. these words are completely made up and are not intended to have any meaning other than the one you give them).

This was hard for me, I hope  you like it and it has 300 words exactly..Yay!…..

                                   ‘BRUNCH TIME”

Yawning and shifting slightly on my smooth rock, blinking at the early sun, stretching, rubbing my head as if by some miracle an idea of what to write for Rachel’s third campaign challenge would ignite, no, not totally on my mind. Actually nothing is on my mind right now. Hunger pains crawl from my stomach to my chest, and I am wishing David would hurry up with our brunch. I notice Synbate followed by Wastopaneer and Tacise wade out of the sparkling water towards me. They will be getting hungry to, especially Wastopaneer, he is always thinking of his stomach, even at this hour. As I roll over, grunts and spray of water heralds their arrival beside me.

“I’m hungry” wailed Wastopaneer, so predictable.

“We all are, just be patient” I sighed, regretting immediately my curt remark.

Although Synbate and Tacise said nothing, I could tell they to were bored and hungry.

“Try and think of something for me to write” I pleaded with the younger ones. Hoping inspirational thoughts will steer them from thinking of their stomachs.

Footsteps familiar to our ears approached, we sprung to our feet all thought of Rachel’s challenge gone, only the familiar fishy smell from behind us, weaving its way over the rocks.

“Arr… there you are..” David cooed softly, tossing our meal down.

He smiled, crouching, watching in silence as we ate. Soon distant noises announced arrival of more humans. As the young ones were always nervous when ever the beach became crowded I nodded to them and together we slid off our rock, into the silver, cool sea smashing the rocks around us.

“Thanks” I barked back to David. He waved knowingly, as I waved, rolled a couple of times and dived deep beneath the waves to join the others and safety.

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Thankyou Rachel for this wonderful opportunity to mix and mingle with so many lovely like minded people, learning and appreciating the craft we all find much joy in sharing.

If you like my entry I am #101, click like if you do, and thankyou.

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About Diane Tulloch

Known also as the Patientdreamer I am a writer who loves to dream, and is passionate about writing stories for the young.
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39 Responses to Third Platform Builder Campaign Challenge

  1. Mel Fowler says:

    I love how you used, ‘what should I write for the campaign’ in your story. It was a great idea. Great story!

  2. Seals? Very interesting POV, and I loved how you used your words 🙂 Great job!

    • To be honest with you, I have never written from an animals POV. This just seemed like a good time to try. I actually had penquins on my mind while writing, but Seals will do just fine. Glad you enjoyed it, and thankyou so much for your comment Angie.

  3. Catherine Johnson says:

    That was awesome! I loved as a normal family thing and then bam your twist at the end rocks! (pun intended 😉 Nice job! I’m voting for you.

  4. What a great idea to use something very every-day instead of zombies and sci fi 🙂 Fun ending and very natural scene, works very well, Diane.

  5. Jessica says:

    Oh yeah that was awesome!! Wonderful twist at the end!! Really cute 🙂

    I’m entry #5

  6. I loved it! I especially love anything Mermaid! Good job! ; )

    • Gosh, you know Sheri, I never even thought of Mermaids, and now wish I had. I used to love anything mermaids and unicorns when I was a kid. Glad you liked it. Do continue to stop by.

  7. Great entry Diane. What a great twist at the end. Loved it! – Pat

    • Thankyou so much Pat. You know I wrote the first few lines at the beginning of the challenge and was so busy with everything else, I only just managed to finish, and post it, in the wee hours of this morning, after checking my emails. Pleased you loved the twist, I thought I would try something new.

  8. that’s funny and a really clever take on the challenge. Mine is #56

  9. Love the way you put yourself into the story! 🙂

    My entry.

  10. Jen says:

    Nice take on the challenge! I think we were all wondering the same thing!

  11. mooderino says:

    Ah, you went meta. Nice job.

    mood

  12. I really enjoyed that story and great use of those difficult words,very clever! I have read quite a few of these challange stories and I am amazed at the diversity of them. It would be a good idea to put them all into a book maybe for charity,I would certainly but one.
    I also want to say I am overwhelmed by your kind comments on my blog,thank you so much for them and for reading my stories I’m so glad you like them.
    I am working my way through your travel stories which are so descriptive they make me want to visit all those places, I haven’t came accross any on Turkey yet but perhaps I will.
    Anne x

  13. Hello Anne, So nice to see you here. I actually tried looking for you last night and couldn’t remember who I found you through. Doesn’t that make you mad when that happens…lol.
    Firstly, you must be telepathic, because all the stories, with the approval of the authors of course, for the challenge are being put into an ebook, so will let you know when that happens.
    Secondly, you are most welcome as I found your blog, warm, inviting and sincere. And
    Thirdly, I am so pleased you like the stories here so far, and especially on my Insight page. Oh yes Turkey will appear at some stage, I will let you know, first though I have some serious writing to do.
    Thankyou Anne for coming by, please do come again, take your time and enjoy.
    Take care
    Diane

  14. I think you approached the challenge in a unique and entertaining way. Love that you groan about what to write for the challenge in the piece. Good use of the challenge words.

  15. Yeah. This entry is loaded with all kinds of genius. Excellent work! 🙂

    • Can I frame your comment!…lol. I have never ever heard that said before, I am bowled over..LOL
      Thankyou very much David, I had go back and read my story a few times after reading your comment.

  16. This is great! well done .. I love a good twist
    xx

  17. Coleen Patrick says:

    Nice entry–very descriptive! Great job 🙂

  18. Shelly Brown says:

    I’m a judge in the third campaigners challenge and you have moved into the second phase of judging! Big congrats!!!

  19. clickerbug says:

    Congratulations on your win!! I’ll bet you’ll love your prize, it sounds awesome. I loved this story, too.I could feel the environment, and … don’t laugh … the weight of the animal’s bodies. They seemed happy and grounded and I just loved it.

    Sorry I haven’t been around to visit much lately, I’m in the middle of a crazy project that consumes all my time. It’ll all be over by December. 🙂

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