“Valentines Day Contest”

Over on Susanna’s Blog she is hosting a “Valentines Day Contest”, about an unlikely Valentine.  I love her blog it’s always full of fun articles and interesting, inspiring information.  We’ve been asked to submit a childrens poem or prose in no more than 200 words,… well it was 150 but she’s changed it now.  I am not great at producing something so quick without a lot of thought and time, hence my hesitation.  I like to try my hand at something fun, even though I know it is not really my field,  but hey… it is fun to try, and I have so enjoyed visiting the other contestants whom I know are so out of my league.   So forgive me this silly little poem I came up with.

Said the Thorn to the Rose

Said the Thorn to the Rose

“Will you be my Valentine?”

Said the Rose to the Thorn

“I’ll be yours if you’ll be mine”

Said the Thorn to the Rose

“Will you hold my hand?”

Said the Rose to the Thorn

“Indeed as we survey our land”

Said the Thorn to the Rose

“With me will you dance?”

Said the Rose to the Thorn

“Yes lets, but watch out for the plants”

Said the Thorn to the Rose

“I adore your flushed petalled face”

Said the Rose to the Thorn

“From the pleasure of your armoured embrace”

Said the Thorn to the Rose,

“Will you be mine for ever more?”

Said the Rose to the Thorn

“Of course, you’re the only one that I adore”.

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About Diane Tulloch

Known also as the Patientdreamer I am a writer who loves to dream, and is passionate about writing stories for the young so that they may join me in the wonders of adventure in countries and cultures afar, and in special moments to remember.
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54 Responses to “Valentines Day Contest”

  1. sonsothunder says:

    Very nice…and I’m sort of happy you chose to post your poem here on your site, before I went to Susanna’s site and stuck out like a sore thumb…instead, seeing as I usually Do stick out like a sore thumb, I’m going over, and …well, stick both my thumbs up…
    Bless You
    paul

    • Hey Paul I’ve gotten a little braver since joining the 12x12in12 group so I thought I would give it a go. I am certainly no poet…lol. Thanks for your lovely comment.

  2. sonsothunder says:

    I long to take my Valentine, Here, There, and A -Tither…
    She seems to be reluctant, though…as we have yet to secure a sitter…

    Sorry, thought you meant …oh, never mind…
    Bless You
    paul

  3. Darlene says:

    Your story is great! I wrote one too but I didn’t realize it was to be a children’s story (silly me)

  4. Oh…lovely!
    Enjoyed the rose and thorn interchange…very clever. 🙂
    My daughter sent me flowers for my B-day…in the bouquet were 3 pale yellow roses…so I read your poem while looking at them…it was perfect!

  5. Mona says:

    Fun!…and clever.

  6. Catherine Johnson says:

    A perfect Valentine entry, the rose. Super poem Diane x

  7. Very sweet and fun, Diane! See? It wasn’t that hard! You did awesomely 🙂 Thanks so much for joining in 🙂

  8. fdelores says:

    A lovely poem explaining how the rose got its thorns. Beautiful.

  9. Great job, Diane! I really enjoyed reading it!

  10. My favorite line: “I adore your flushed petalled face.” I love that description! I will think of that when/if my rose bush comes into bloom this spring. So sweet!

  11. LOL, thankyou Cathy. I loved that to, I can surprise myself sometimes when I come out with a line like that. Then I read it later on and wonder where/or how I got that…lol.

  12. Great poem! I love the way you’ve written this with every other line dialogue between them. And in rhyme, no less. Fantastic!

  13. What a great amorous dialogue between the thorn and the rose! Super entry!

  14. Very creative, Diane! I really like your use of repeated phrases and dialogue!

  15. Natalie says:

    What a love story! 🙂 Who knew a rose and it’s thorn loved each other so much? Great job, Diane!

  16. clarbojahn says:

    Loved your poem.So clever. Thanks for sharing. 🙂

  17. Heather says:

    Well done! I love the image of his armored embrace.

  18. Rebecca Fyfe says:

    A very pretty poem! Thanks for sharing! 🙂

  19. Tracy Bermeo says:

    I love it. Still having trouble with mine…… I love roses. Great for Valentine’s Day.

  20. Hannah says:

    Yes, I’m glad you posted it here. Your poetry page doesn’t come up in the reader. I enjoyed your back and forth poem. It felt like dancing.

  21. Diane, I love it. It really is a very good poem. Great entry!

  22. Tina Cho says:

    I like the armored embrace! Very cute poem!!

  23. This is cool because there has to be thorns when you have roses so they do kind of go together! I like to “hear” them talk! 🙂

  24. Love your poem. It is very clever and a great love story!

  25. That was too sweet Diane. Great job

  26. I saw an earlier comment where you said you were no poet. Very lovely entry. My favorite line: Said the Rose to the Thorn

    “From the pleasure of your armoured embrace”

  27. sunriseovertheiceberg says:

    That is an excellent poem.

  28. Very nice poem Diane! I loved that you tried something that was a little out of your comfort zone! You put yourself out there and I think you did a fantastic job!

  29. Thankyou Eric for your kind words. It’s when others are so kind that one feels comfortable enough to stretch and try something new, even amongst other writers, its been a lovely experience.

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